Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

It goes without saying that in this sophisticated world we live in, the points of poeple's views toward the controvertial question whether or not teachers received more appreciation, were more valued by others who paid more attention to them than what we can observe today are different. As far as I am concerned, I am of that group who agree to this statement. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated in the following essay.
To begin with, the fact that the generation has been utterly changed cannot be covered to anyone who at least has experiences two different decades. Thus, it is natural that values one important of which is respecting and appreciating teachers and those who teach others have been undergone some changes. Let me make a reference to one of my own experiences to clarify my claim. When I was in high school I had a math teacher who was so famous and well-experienced. He was so valued either by students or others, wither for his personality or teaching experiences. However this was compeltely different when I found one of my classmate teaching as same high school teacher some years ago. Neither was he appreciated by students nor he could believe how many ones disregard his efforts in teaching. Hence, this expereince, as an example clearly illustrates the point mentioned above.
In addition, the level of knowledge and information have been inreasingly improved. Not that I want to say that people of this new generation as well-informed in this advanced world we see around can treat the teachers most of whom are really invaluable, but I think this is a factor has made individuals behave differently. Having this in mind, needless to say that all teachers today are of high value and sederve so much attention, but people should change their mind in this case.
Last but not the least, according to all the foregoing statements, I firmly believe that teachers today are being less valued than what we saw in the past.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 566, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...is personality or teaching experiences. However this was compeltely different when I fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, really, so, thus, well, at least, i think, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87202380952 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88430632938 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9743115309 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.133333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108019515367 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355024108396 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420511268181 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0535810114398 0.150856017488 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417447681238 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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