Some people believe school cafeterias should stop selling soft drinks and other high-sugar drinks, while others think students should have a choice in what they drink. Which option do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
School cafeteria is the place where kids suppose to get the healthiest and best prep food for its give information to student what is the proper meals to eat or not. Moreover, it is also set example on how important balanced diet and exercise are. I believe the school canteen should only provide the healthy choice of drink and prohibited the selling of high carbonated and sugary drinks. I would like to explain my idea based on academically, economically, and medically perspective.
Academically, by providing those drinks, school implicitly gives permission and agreement to student for consuming something harmful. It project bad precedent that not only school disregard the problem but also children do not need to take care of their body. This could be expanded to drinks alcohol excessively or using drugs since in the mind of the kids, it is okay to consume something pernicious as long it is fulfilling and delicious.
Economically, the soft drinks are more expensive than juices or milks. I also want to put emphasize in the risk of future health expenses. Based on the research, children who obese more likely to get heart disease, hypertension and diabetes mellitus when they older. This could put high burden to country economy and quite detrimental to individual financial status.
Medically, high calories drink that contains high sugar is damaging especially to a kids who still in developing and puberty phase. This type of drink will exacerbates obesity, hormonal imbalance and affects their growth. School as education institution should prevent this for the sake of kids’ wellbeing.
Ultimately, with all the stated reason I believe that the soft drinks and high sugary drinks should be banned at a education institution for the sake of future generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, still, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21799307958 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82597509251 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612456747405 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4810747676 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.533333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252293431212 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730664735334 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706339789459 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136542519781 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573919621479 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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