Some people believe school cafeterias should stop selling soft drinks and other high sugar drinks while others think students should have a choice in what they drink Which option do you agree with Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

No one can deny that people will have different opinions about the given topic. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely go against the idea about stopping to sell soft drinks and other high sugar drinks in the school cafeterias. It is my firm belief there should not be prohibition of sugar contents in the school cafeterias for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, it has been found that the sugar content carries high amount of calories in it. As student should work hard in the academic lessons, they need high energy to boost up their mind which can be found in the drinks containing high sugar. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, when I was in my undergraduate year, having an great penchant over study and practically trying to accomplish it, I used to face lots of mental anxiety but after consuming the soft drinks, I used to get relaxed. As a result, I was able to cogitate over a subject matter and able to get a good score.
Secondly, If school allow student to consume soft drinks and high sugar drinks, they will less likely to engage in other toxic materials like drugs, alcohol and so on. Moreover, If they don't consume these types of toxicity, they will have high probability of securing good marks in the examination. Taking the research by Daniel Golman into account from his book named Emotional Intillegence, it has been found that those school who freed their student in context of consuming soft drinks and high sugar drinks has less chances of taking drugs. It is clear to see why allowing sugar drinks reduces consuming toxic material.
Thirdly, although high sugar and soft drinks may have short term negative impact on students, it definitely has long term benefit. Economically, soft drinks and high sugar contents are expensive than the breakfast and they seems to be unwanted to consume because they never fill up your stomach but they definitely feed up your mind and help to grow student.
In light of the above mention reasons, I strongly believe that allowing soft drinks and high sugar drinks should not be banned in the school's cafeterias.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as for, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73901808786 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47379012351 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529715762274 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.7242722936 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.266666667 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383090010863 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129001864478 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860879418038 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229337520582 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400556413411 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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