TOEFL essay:When people succeed, it is because of hard work, Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific and examples to explain your position.

No one deny that there are both the positions for whether people acquire success by hard work or luck. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely state that people should rely on hard work for their success. It is my firm belief that there is less possibilities of achieving in the pinnacle of success on relying into the luck for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

First of all, for a industrious person it is apparent to get a good job or initiate a successful business, which would lead them to kiss the acme of achievement. These kinds of personality scarcely involve in the mundane work, rather they highly follow the ambitious dream. I admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, Physics has always been the tough subject, which is nearly quagmire to move through it. But, being a believer of laborious task, I had chosen physics as my major subject and I had been pondering and learning it since ten years. As a result, I am working at Acme engineering college as a lecturer and indulging in many research activities. For this reason, my hard work in physics is helping me to mount the success.

Secondly, hardworking people always dig down into the cogent of things they perform that helped them to become a erudite person. Drawing from the experience of one of my friend, he do have predilection over literature. For that, he used to study so many literary work from all around the word. Moreover, he used to stay in isolation for many days and compose poetry. After many years of his hard work, his poetry get published by renowned publication of Nepal. Later on, he wined the famous national literary price named 'Madan Purasakar" of Nepal. This would not have been possible, if he didn't have penchant over the literature and would not be succeeded.

Finally, I must admit that there are rare cases of getting success relying on luck, which are merely fleeting. For stance, my brother was never an industrious person, but used to believe in fortune. As a result, he used to fill many form regarding the lottery. One day he wined the lottery of about twenty five thousand dollar. He with extreme ecstasy went to the casino and loosed his money that he earned in the lottery. It's certainly clear to see why relying on fortune does not help people to get success.

For all the reasons that I have stated, I agree that people get success due to hard work, but not because of luck. If we want to get success in life, we should always be a industrious.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are less possibilities'?
Suggestion: there are less possibilities
...heir success. It is my firm belief that there is less possibilities of achieving in the pinnacle of success...
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Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun possibilities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ess. It is my firm belief that there is less possibilities of achieving in the pinna...
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Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...equent paragraphs. First of all, for a industrious person it is apparent to ge...
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Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...they perform that helped them to become a erudite person. Drawing from the experi...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... the experience of one of my friend, he do have predilection over literature. For ...
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Line 5, column 595, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...his would not have been possible, if he didnt have penchant over the literature and w...
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Line 7, column 229, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun form seems to be countable; consider using: 'many forms'.
Suggestion: many forms
...n fortune. As a result, he used to fill many form regarding the lottery. One day he wined...
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Line 9, column 171, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...et success in life, we should always be a industrious.
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Line 9, column 171, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...et success in life, we should always be a industrious.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64270152505 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55970610578 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544662309368 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8136073838 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.24 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.36 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162961812021 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473021545795 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467995122445 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101978633584 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378269895354 0.0645574589148 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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