Some people believe school cafeterias should stop selling soft drinks and other high-sugar drinks, while others think students should have a choice in what they drink. Which option do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Students spend ample of time at the school. School is the place where students just not receive only academic education, but they also learn various skills, discipline, planning, organizing. But most importantly how to be healthy is being taught to them at school. In learning about health canteen can play an important role. Because of that it should provide healthy food to students. I believe that soft drinks should be banned in the school canteen. I will explain my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, soft drinks are spiked with sugar and have no nutritional content. The main ingredients of these carbonated drinks are water, sugar and coloring agents which are very harmful to human body. Excessive sugar consumption contributes to diabetes, which is life threatening. Moreover, too much sugar can cause tooth decay and lead to bad breath. Those who consume too much sugar, they are at risk of becoming obese which can lead to medical complications. Thus, schools should only allow healthy drinks such as soy bean milk, yoghurt drink, herbal teas and others which have low sugar content but rich in protein and carbohydrate.
Secondly, students in fact waste their parents' money buying drinks that provide zero health benefits. children who want to cool off during the summer can replace their soft drinks with natural fruit juice, lime juice or water. This is a much healthier option and will have the same effect. Further, nutritionally rich food tends to be more expensive and thus canteen operators are reluctant to sell them. However, if the government offers subsidies to these operators as well as food coupon to make healthy food more affordable to students, it would be successful in creating a society which is health conscious.
Let’s put in a nutshell, students have a right to choose their favorite drinks. But schools should not sell drinks that can harm their students because it helps children to save money and have a healthy life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lth canteen can play an important role. Because of that it should provide healthy food ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Children
...inks that provide zero health benefits. children who want to cool off during the summer ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in fact, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08615384615 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53298990717 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596923076923 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1344277284 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.65 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275991171163 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.08181368674 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682072542728 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164552651716 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049260960884 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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