some people like to go to the same places for their vacations. Other people like to take their vacations in different places. Which one do you prefer?
There are certain people who prefer to take their vacations in the same place. When they return from a vacation, they ask themselves, “When can I go back there again?” On the other hand/However, there are people who would rather visit many places. Moreover/Furthermore, they enjoy doing many different things on their vacations. When they return from a vacation, they ask themselves, “Where can I go and what can I do next?”
My parents are perfect examples of the first kind of people. They always go to a lake in the mountains. They first went there on their honeymoon, and several years later they bought a vacation cabin there. They have gone there two or three times a year for over thirty years. They have made friends with the people who also own cabins there and often get together with them. My mother enjoys sailing and swimming while my father prefers to go fishing. My parents like variety, but they say they can get variety by going to their cabin at different times of the year. They particularly like to go there in the autumn when the leaves are changing color.
Personally, I feel it’s important to visit different places. Of course, when I was a child, I went to my parents’ cabin with them for my vacation, but when I got older, I began to want to travel to many different places. I enjoy skiing; however, the ski resorts in my country are very crowded and expensive. I would rather go skiing in Switzerland or in Canada. My favorite subject at the university was ancient history; therefore, I like to visit historic places. Several years ago, I traveled to Angkor Wat in Cambodia with my uncle and aunt. I also want to visit the pyramids in Egypt; furthermore/moreover, I’d like to see Machu Picchu in Peru.
My parents believe that you can never get to know a place too well. I understand their point of view. However, I find that going to strange places is more exciting. I don’t want to go to the same place twice because the world is so huge and exciting.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ple who would rather visit many places. Moreover/Furthermore, they enjoy doing many diff...
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Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... Moreover/Furthermore, they enjoy doing many different things on their vacations. When they re...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ter they bought a vacation cabin there. They have gone there two or three times a ye...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ree times a year for over thirty years. They have made friends with the people who a...
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...got older, I began to want to travel to many different places. I enjoy skiing; however, the sk...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, kind of, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68820224719 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80610385564 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505617977528 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1935133863 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8636363636 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.77272727273 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264944101488 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867152406714 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832090095165 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159480163818 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461867839051 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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