Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

By and large, Internet has transformed life in the modern society we live, substantially. Evil or divine, depends on the lens through one looks through. While there is a plethora of people who are in the conviction that accessing to this massive amount of information creates hazardous situations, others take a radically different point of view, asserting that this information are of importance and valuable. To the extent that my personal perspective is concerned, I accord with the second group. Among countless reasons which give adherence to my opinion, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in what follows.
Firstly, Internet has provided all people of the world, regardless of their skin color or social status, an endless access to newest achievements in science. Not only has it put an end to the ridiculous pyramid structure of knowledge, where aristocracies, were the only ones with access to novel and rich sources of knowledge, but it has also made it much easier to explore through it. Was I deprived from Internet, my thesis wouldn't have had formed in a way it did, thanks to the Internet. Filled with shared minds of best scientist of all around the world, I was able to get more creative and pay my debt, by sharing my results.
Secondly, through internet the communication avenues have been broaden. Seeing your siblings on the other side of the world while talking to them seemed an idea to be found only in Sci-Fi books. Communicating live through the lens of video cameras, people can now enjoy high quality communication and spend less money to do so in the same breath. Banks are able to transfer money more efficiently and more swiftly through the magic of Internet. Six months ago a friend of mine was struggling with financial problems and situation had got so bad for him that he couldn't even afford to buy food. Once more, Internet to rescue .several clicks and less than hour later he was enjoying his Coca cola while swallowing his sandwich in one bite.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons and explanations leads to the conclusion that internet provides a valuable source of information for people to use.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'endless access'.
Suggestion: endless access
...s of their skin color or social status, an endless access to newest achievements in science. Not ...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'to the newest'.
Suggestion: to the newest
...lor or social status, an endless access to newest achievements in science. Not only has i...
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Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...Was I deprived from Internet, my thesis wouldnt have had formed in a way it did, thanks...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the best'.
Suggestion: of the best
... the Internet. Filled with shared minds of best scientist of all around the world, I wa...
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Line 4, column 64, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'broadened'.
Suggestion: broadened
...net the communication avenues have been broaden. Seeing your siblings on the other side...
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Line 4, column 562, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ituation had got so bad for him that he couldnt even afford to buy food. Once more, Int...
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Line 4, column 624, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... buy food. Once more, Internet to rescue .several clicks and less than hour later ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, while, in short, by and large

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1794.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91506849315 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75777071304 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619178082192 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7902780436 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.125 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219069115587 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619765260297 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545852738633 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145783793429 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505159366967 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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