Some people think that the government should spend as much money as possible on protecting that environment Other think money should be spent on other things such as education and healthcare Which one of these opinions do you agree with Use specific reaso

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Some people think that the government should spend as much money as possible on protecting that environment. Other think money should be spent on other things such as education and healthcare. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Our planet is astonishing but tenuous, and this is the people`s duty to keep it safe for next generations. I personally think that government should fund protection of the environment as much as possible. The reasons why I hold this stance will be elaborated in the paragraphs below.
One of the reasons is that living in the clean environment facilitates humans` health. It is the statistically proved fact that individuals live longer lives in places, which are lack or has insignificant amount of factories around. Industrial facilities emit tremendous amount of pollutants in the atmosphere annually, leading to enhancing of acid rains, which in turn, demolish forests and increase concentration of the Carbone dioxide and decrease fraction of the pure oxygen in the air. This contributes to evolving of a myriad of disease throughout the society. If government sponsors programs to confine the releasing of the pollutants by the factories, people will struggle from illnesses in the lower degree than they do nowadays. Although spending money on the healthcare is indispensable, it will be less demanded in case of ameliorating humans wellbeing in the natural way. To that end, protecting of the planet is likely to enable the raise of the humans` quality of life.
Another reason is that our planet is the habitat not merely for mankind, but for other species as well. Some humans` activities, such as poaching have catastrophic consequences in terms of existence of certain animals. As I read recently in the National Geographic magazine, the situation around elephants in Africa is egregious. People there kill poor animals to make money on selling ivory abroad, and in fact, the population of the elephants has been decreased dramatically. If the officials of that region crafts more national parks and protect endanger animals, the world could avoid loosing the one of the magnificent creatures on the planet. So, eliminating the poaching by the governments will make possible for next generations to continue enjoying beauty of the rare animals.
To recapitulate, I feel that it is pivotal to sponsor environmental projects by the government. This is because it will improve life conditions for the humans and other creatures on the Earth.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, i feel, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28729281768 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10699684301 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582872928177 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6497362243 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.333333333 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.38888888889 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172225872911 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465813239095 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500033471421 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959594306247 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289910386277 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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