Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to liver with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Many young adults have different beliefs about wanting independence from parents as soon as possible or staying with them for a younger time. In my opinion, i feel that young adults should prefer to live with their families for a longer time.I feel this for 2 main reasons , which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
First of all, as young adults , you are new to the world and just growing up in your life with different perspectives. So you will look for someone to guide you and support you in whatever decisions you take , hence having a family around makes it easy for you to make wise decisions as they will always wish the best for you. My personal experience is a best example of this , in my difficult times , whenever i used to feel low , my parents have always been my ray of hope, their guidance have always led me towards the best path in my life. A hug from my parents is everything I need to boost myself to achieve better things in life. Hence , it's certainly clear that why I prefer living with parents as young adults.
Secondly, being young adults , it's the best time for us to spend time with our parents. Since we do not have much responsibilities on us , we can spend time with parents or travel to different countries with them and make the best memories. Moreover with aging , we become busy enough to spare seconds for our parents and in meantime our parents are also growing old , perhaps declining physically and mentally. For this reason , I think spending most of my time with my parents as young adults is better.
In conclusion , I do feel that as young adults , one should live with their families for a longer time is better as family is your guiding light and your biggest support in everything you do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54458598726 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43366598894 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503184713376 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.106483984 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.916666667 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44089457255 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186603157573 0.076458572812 244% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105925502355 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318084476684 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935497721745 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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