Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.Which of these situations do you think is better?
When we reach adulthood, We're faced with an unavoidable question: should we move out as soon as possible, or should we stay for a little while longer? Some might prefer to live with family, while others might prefer to live alone. I think we should move out as early as possible. In the following essay, I will attempt to demonstrate why I hold this belief.
Firstly, living independently from one’s own parents early on prepares the individual for life’s problems at an earlier age, making them more equipped to deal with more serious real-world issues when they inevitably appear later in life. To list an example from my own personal experience, I was tasked with picking my first apartment. This was a daunting task for 22 year old me. I ended up picking an apartment that I liked visually, instead of focusing on the practical aspects of it; The apartment’s living room walls were windows, which made it very hot in the summer. I have since learned from this mistake. Luckily, the apartment’s a rental, and didn’t cost much. In the future, when I decide to buy a real apartment, I will know not to pick one with glass walls.
Secondly, living on one’s own offers a sort of freedom that living with one’s parents does not. For instance, my parents disapprove of any risky activity which might result in me getting physically hurt. Had I lived with them, they would never allow me to learn how to skateboard. Living alone gives me the freedom to pursue this hobby. Another example is painting; my parents never believed I could paint and went as far as telling me I shouldn’t do it because it’s a waste of time. I disagree. When I lived with my parents, I couldn’t paint. Now, after moving out, I can paint all day and there’s no one around to stop me from following my dreams.
Understandably, there are some people who choose to stay with their parents for a longer period of time. It’s easier to save money this way, especially if the individual has a job, there’s more disposable income and you get to enjoy home-cooked meals everyday.
In conclusion, when faced with the decision to stay for a little while longer to leave as soon as possible, I pick the latter. The decision to move out early prepares the young adult to the outside world and gives them the chance to express themselves without the confines of parent permissions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'our'?
Suggestion: our
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...to stay with their parents for a longer period of time. It's easier to save money this wa...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... and you get to enjoy home-cooked meals everyday. In conclusion, when faced with th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85060240964 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81044234096 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561445783133 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4144378694 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233904067196 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632406160552 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548831865558 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133484215135 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301379503606 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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