Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
There have been several heated discussions on whether young adults should live with their parents for a longer time or not. As for everything, there are always two sides to every question. Personally, I believe that youngs adults should live their life independently. I feel this for two reasons, which I will explore in the following ways.
First of all, Through Independence Young adults learn about how to manage the life without their parents; Moreover, they also learn the value of monetary funds which may be very difficult for them if they live with their parents. My personal experience is a compelling example of this; About three years back, I got a job in a city which is 300 Kilometers away from my home town. So, I shifted to the new city, where I learned many important aspects of how to save money and where it should be rightly invested. This is a game-changer for me; If I am not shifted to a new city, I can't learn about various techniques related to the saving of money and where it should be placed.
Secondly, Independent teaches young adults about how to create and maintain the relation with society. Maintaining the relationship with society is very difficult, and if young adults manage to learn such a link, it will benefit adults for the longer run. For better understanding, let us look at the example of my brother, about ten years back, due to financial crises faced by my family, he(My brother) Decided to shift to Mumbai, A financial capital of India; He got a job in Mall as a sales officer. During his work, he creates and maintains relationships with many designer companies. Such relation benefited him a lot when he becomes an entrepreneur.
In conclusion, although in some cases prefer to live with their family, it is better than live apart. Nevertheless, I am of the opinion that independence gives us more teaching lessons; this is because we will learn some practical aspects related to fiscal matters and life matters.
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion:
...ted to fiscal matters and life matters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, as for, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1638.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81764705882 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70986120509 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555882352941 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2640530142 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.2 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31089790778 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111884739102 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109712438823 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197874737708 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07722153839 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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