These days, many schools not only have classes, but also have clubs and various events. The reason is that studying is probably for the future of students, but various clubs are directly helpful to students. I will tell you three reasons to tell you why student organization or club activities are more beneficial than academic studies to students.
To begin with, the school club can make many friends. There are so many different clubs in the school. Students make friends in these various clubs. If you make friends here, you can meet friends who are more compatible because you have the same hobby. In Particular, you can meet many good seniors. Therefore, you can ask your seniors questions about studying and receive many exam papers and materials for studying last year. For example, I was able to do better on the test, because I got a test paper from my seniors last year.
Second, to be able to make a hobby. Students must have a hobby to relieve stress while studying. However, students do not have time to find a hobby and it is very hard to search for what I like. Therefore, if you do various activities, you can find it naturally. For instance, my friend went to a knitting club, because she had nowhere to go, and he found a hobby there.
Last, club activities are a great help to the life record. Life records are very important in Korea when you go to university. We use clubs to show interviewers our passion for dreams. If you do something related to your dream in a club, university interviewers are more likely to be judged and selected. A club is a shortcut that makes it easier to go to college.
This is why school activities are more important than academies. To add one more thing, academies are neither helpful to life records nor interesting. So, if you do not have time, I recommend you to do school activities harder than academy
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many
...lub can make many friends. There are so many different clubs in the school. Students make frie...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...do school activities harder than academy
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in particular, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64759036145 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5317891084 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512048192771 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.2444233128 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.0869565217 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4347826087 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73913043478 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176155176824 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558604432264 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574824222144 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106323625525 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588572393394 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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