success is most important in life or people who are happy even when they fail. which one is the best choice from your view point?
The question is whether success is most vital thing in life or when people are happy particularly when they fail. Everyone with regard to his own perspective may maintain a specific direction toward this statement. Some believe that only factor which is worthwhile in this world is prosperity while others have a conviction that joyful people, who can tolerate any hardship under every condition, are most prosperous humans. I am unanimous with the latter group; so the next paragraphs will vastly elucidate my vantage point through two salient reasons:
To begin with, as the old saying goes “just failure can guarantee your future". When a person tends to achieve a goal, in the first step, he should learn to keep his spirit in high level. There are plentiful of obstacles in the success route; hence, without passing them, the mentioned man will not be able to acquire sufficient experiences. Let's look at the history. During centuries, famous scientists could invent or design the formulas which have changed our life in the best ways. All of these well-known inventors experienced failures for many times or years; however, they knew that the aforementioned failures were leading them toward their purpose. I remember when I participated in a swimming contest, I expected to become championship for the first time but I could not gain any acceptable record. I let down and cried for weeks then I made a decision to leave swimming. One day, my grandmother came to visit us, when she was aware about my decision, told me just one sentence “the real taste of success is very sweet and it would not be obtained without failure". I accepted her advice and now I am a professional swimmer. In short, if we do not fail, the real meaning of prosperity will never be understood.
Moreover, if human beings always look for the prosperity, they may gain it but gradually their personality may also alter in this way. Based on a recent research in psychology field, the overwhelming majority of winners who do not experienced the failures, will usually become selfish people. They would rather not communicate with others and unfortunately they will restrict to their home. Solitary life may transform them to depressed humans or even worse they may think about suicide thoughts. Yet, needless to say that happiness releases more Endorphin in brain- a chemical substance in brain which is responsible for better concentration. Besides being happy, when humans associate with others and make new friendships; as a matter a fact they can share their opinions with each other and make new roads toward their goals.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that having high spirit and pleasant soul is able to encourage humans to pursue their goals without any frustrating even when they fail. You may be a successful and selfish man; however, without joyful soul, you will be accounted as dead person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, well, while, in short, to begin with, to sum up, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2441.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03298969072 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74856729411 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60824742268 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6878895068 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.954545455 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219528729228 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566546357856 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0733418547342 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131144063501 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046630864573 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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