Now we are live in a life full of sophistication where there are many electronic devices around us that help us in our daily life. But unfortunately, they have negative impact on the lives of people, especially children, where they waste their time and make them idle just playing with it, such as watching TV, playing on the phone, computer and other newly manufactured devices. Now I will compare between my life and my young sister’s life.
Firstly, when I was child I was spend my time for learning I used to go to an institute after finishing school to help me solve homework and teach me new thing that help me in my studies. Now, my sister just go to school after that when she returns to home she asked about her phone and play on it, when the day is about to end, she remembers her assignment and briefly counts it without seeing additional information that might help her study this.
Furthermore, I remember when I was young I had lot of friend in school in our street and I used to play with them. But when I look at the life of my sister now, she has a few friends, because most children are reluctant to play on the phone and are not interested in making friends and play with them
In conclusion, families must not take their children phones or make to them like time that allow to them just play in one two hour in all of day and also, make them talk with lot of children because if they do not do this their children will be impersonal in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 33, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
... life. Firstly, when I was child I was spend my time for learning I used to go to an...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted in making friends and play with them In conclusion, families must not take th...
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Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'hour' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hours'.
Suggestion: hours
...that allow to them just play in one two hour in all of day and also, make them talk ...
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Line 4, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ldren will be impersonal in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, so, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1198.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32490974729 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39865006542 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537906137184 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 370.8 618.680645161 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.1344086022 194% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.302960241 48.9658058833 248% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.142857143 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5714285714 20.6045352989 192% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1428571429 5.45110844103 223% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0635916086513 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263687790846 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417035362594 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.045989075059 0.150856017488 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377151021183 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.37 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 86.8835125448 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.0537634409 175% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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