TOEFL ESSAY Traveling to a different country can be both exciting and frustrating at the same time What are the most important pieces of advice that you would give visitors coming to your country

Every year, people worldwide leave their homes to visit new countries and situations. Some of them leave their homelands as tourists OR immigrants. At the same time, they experience different feelings, including hope and disappointment. There is nothing worse than not being able to control our emotions and giving up our dreams. Traveling to my country could be amazing and fascinating traveling for everyone who loves art and history. However, there are a couple of points that you could improve the quality and quantity of your travel to Iran.
First of all, before embarking on your travel, take an investigation of Iran's social status and see a picture of Iran's society. In Iran, Hejab is compulsory but just as a small scarf. You can see different people by different sorts of Hejab. There is a dispute inside the society over religious views. However, the followers of each view could tolerate the followers of other views, so you will enjoy your traveling merely if you add a small scarf to your burden. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. one of my foreign friends wanted to set off to my country, and I told her that she should have a scarf when she arrived at Iran's airport. At first, she was worried, but when she arrived and saw Iran's environment, she got along with Iran's situation and said there was nothing to worry about.
The second offer I would like to add is that Iran has two different counting units, Rial and Toman. Rial is a formal unit to exchange, but the informal unit is Toman. Toman is common when purchasing. Toman has one zero less than Rial. Therefore you should ask if the prices are in Rial or Toman when you pay for something. For instance, I saw one tourist in Iran that was completely confused due to two counting units when he tried to buy a handicraft, and I resolved this conflict.
In conclusion, I strongly encourage everyone to travel; traveling can show how to find new friends and make new personal connections. I take my hat off to anyone who experiences new challenges despite the limitation imposed. Also, I think that life is too short, and it couldn't hurt to have a look at the world. Traveling is one of the best things that everyone should do before getting too rusty.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: One
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ing. Toman has one zero less than Rial. Therefore you should ask if the prices are in Ria...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... I think that life is too short, and it couldnt hurt to have a look at the world. Trave...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6835443038 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59285992845 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559493670886 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5974488713 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.0833333333 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4583333333 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174113838011 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453741509245 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491924290565 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102722122134 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664028419805 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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