TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Some universities advocate budget to sports and social activities as much as they advocate to classes and libraries. But other universities may advocate budget to sports activities less than classes and libraries. I strongly agree with the first ideas. Because of importance sports and social activities and impact of them on studying and learning, they should advocate financial support to sports and social activities as much as they advocate to classes.
Firstly, sports and social activities are very important in today's lives. Since many people go to university not only for studying for a degree but they also go to university for getting experiences specially in sports and societies, it would be better to they advocate equal financial support for both classes and social activities. Furthermore, some of majors universities are relevant with these activities. For example, majors such as Sociology, Physical Education are directly related to these activities.
Secondly, these activities certainly have a considerable influences on learning and studying. In the other words, sports activities are getting along with the purpose of studying and learning. For example, according some researchers, exercise have an direct influence on learning. In fact, these activities improve learning process. In additional, social activities result in people would be more sociable. As a result, it impact on relationships between students that it will be very useful, for example, in team work projects. So, these activities will be relevant with the purpose of university indirectly.
Broadly speaking, I believe that universities should advocate the same amount of budget for both classes and social activities not only because of being a purpose of some people to entering university but also because of relation between learning and sports activities.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 164, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'sport'.
Suggestion: sport
...her universities may advocate budget to sports activities less than classes and librar...
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Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'influence'?
Suggestion: influence
...ctivities certainly have a considerable influences on learning and studying. In the other ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...cording some researchers, exercise have an direct influence on learning. In fact, ...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...fact, these activities improve learning process. In additional, social activities resul...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'impacts'?
Suggestion: impacts
...would be more sociable. As a result, it impact on relationships between students that ...
^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'broadly speaking', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a result']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260317460317 0.229887763892 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.12380952381 0.158761421928 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0825396825397 0.0866891130778 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0730158730159 0.046263068375 158% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0349206349206 0.0685040099705 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.146031746032 0.118717715034 123% => OK
Participles: 0.047619047619 0.0351676179071 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93529640611 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031746031746 0.0309702414327 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0666666666667 0.0887237588012 75% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0222222222222 0.0209618222197 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0139019557991 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1853.0 2387.08602151 78% => OK
No of words: 282.0 408.028673835 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.57092198582 5.86048508987 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48200974243 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.489361702128 0.338922669872 144% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.36170212766 0.251872472559 144% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.283687943262 0.174417080927 163% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.184397163121 0.112833075102 163% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93529640611 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 212.727598566 57% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432624113475 0.524397521467 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 40.7456645505 59.2087087015 69% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 17.625 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.7662667445 48.84282405 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.8125 120.699889404 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.5533526081 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9375 0.644075263715 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 53.795212766 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.95890410959 1.45489161554 135% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342315395302 0.300154397459 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.139570072674 0.103427244359 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.127672870362 0.0752933317313 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527904726835 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.225116906392 0.151897553556 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140958238478 0.114077575197 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105631059641 0.0781384742642 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.340970694586 0.336927656856 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0648863344518 0.067059652881 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239786599177 0.210909579961 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100304447672 0.0618886996521 162% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.91756272401 163% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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