It is cryptically clear that leader, who manages a group of people, is a pivotal and inevitable part of not only our life but also almost every group. Every group includes a team, who work on a project, a company, organization or even a country needs to be managed by someone. Without any manager who controls all of the processes of reaching the group goal, successful will not come and they are liable to culminate with fail Some people believe that these people are innately leaders. Whereas others believe that it is learnable to be a leader. Personally, I am in favor with the latter group for two legitimate reasons, which are detailed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, a manager or leader has some adorable characteristic which is completely obtainable not innate. Some of these features are visionary, innovative, and decisive on their decision, making the best decision in crucial situations, and so on. It is obvious that this kind of characteristics can be learned. As a case in point, when I was working at a computer company, which was very reputable, three months ago, we had a manager who was good at making a good and decisive decision. When you check out her resume, It shows that she has a repudiate studies in some majors. Besides, she worked as an internship in some other companies. Being successful on all of her projects shows that had a considerable studying, instructor, and teachers. It goes without saying, a leader who wants to manage a group of people must be well-educated and be able to intellect others people which will come if they work hard to learn anything is needed.
Moreover, suppose leadership comes naturally, an important question, which comes to our mind, is that why leaders have not been a leader since they embarked on their work. In other words, if it is innate and people cannot learn it, they do not need to be employed as a position, which is not comparable with a managerial position. For example, my company manager who I mentioned before, he was not employed as a manager at the company. At first, she was just as a sinecure that even did not have any experiences. But she was a punctual, consistent person who promotes little by little. After two years working at the company, she showed her innovative. As a result, she was promoted to a manager in a small portion of the office. Finally, two months ago she could achieve her final goal. As is clear, she was not a manager on the first day of her working.
To sum up, I completely agree with the idea that leadership does not come naturally. Not only do leader have to have some obtainable characteristics but also they have to try to be applied as a manager. Everyone who has the propensity to be a manager or leader in any group will need to have ambitions for it and try to attain it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...meone. Without any manager who controls all of the processes of reaching the group goal, s...
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Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d they are liable to culminate with fail Some people believe that these people ar...
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Line 1, column 491, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...that these people are innately leaders. Whereas others believe that it is learnable to ...
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Line 2, column 547, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...k out her resume, It shows that she has a repudiate studies in some majors. Besides, she wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, well, whereas, for example, kind of, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63126252505 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7545277896 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480961923848 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5816105586 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.44 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.96 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150482905105 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467905836444 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550391767509 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107271334215 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335531547702 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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