TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Sports and social activities have always been an essential part of any universities and colleges. I agree with the statement that says sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries, and they should receive equal financial support because it's beneficial for students' health and it plays an important role on that school's feature.

Since the school itself is a place for studying and teaching, it becomes an area full of stress sometimes, especially during the finals' period. Most universities aim to not only educate their students academically, but also they say it's important to develop their mindset as a whole. Meanwhile, sports and social activities are both beneficial to students' mental and physical health as it ensures students with collaboration, physical education, and other vital skills.

Secondly, extracurricular activities became the feature of the school. Students tend to choose their college or university by their non-academic clubs as it allows them to develop their hobby besides studying. For example, when my sister got accepted by two universities, she ended up choosing the one that provides sports club, because she was engaged with basketball. Also, supporting the sports clubs are important, because if they win at competitions of other schools, their school will become familiar.

As a conclusion, since the extracurriculars help both the school and their students, the school should support them.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 225.0 407.700716846 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49333333333 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95705559261 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608888888889 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 618.680645161 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7565702286 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.6 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199859552144 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081645684188 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862708269711 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133731874498 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116082705899 0.0645574589148 180% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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