Education is an important part of our lives. Without being educated, you will not be able to get a job, or be an effective part in our society. In addition to, an educated citizen will create better country. Some people believe that sports and other social activities are just important as classes and libries and universities should spend their budget equally. While others diagree. In my view, though sports and other activites provide benefits for students, libraries and classes are much more important for students, so universities should spend their money more on them for many reasons.
First, students need their library to get necessary information for their studies and researches. During the study years in a university, students would have to do so many assisgnments and studies. So, the library should have a mutliple sources of information that up- to date. For instance, when I was in the pharmacy university, I would do many studies related to the course. But, the problem was my university's library was not fully euipped with necessary materials, such as new computer systems, or it was lacking references that I needed. Therefore, I forced to purchase many books from private libraries off-campus, and consequently it cost me a hug amount of money, and completely waste of time. Despite of the fact, my university was spending too much money on their soccer teams because he is popluar team among others. as you can see, if the university should would have cut-off some of the team budget and spend the ampount on improving the library, I would have been to loss all money and time to provide materials.
Second, students can benefit form improving their classes. If the university, or college spend their money on increasing the number of classes, the number of students will reduce in one class. As a result, students will concentrate more, and get more benefit from the lectures. For instance, when I was in the college, studying for pre-pharmacy school, Many classes were filled with too much students. I remembered that one day, There was 90 students in one class, So many students, including myself, were not able to hear the professor talk. This situation was so distruptive and we couldnot focus during that lecture. As a result, many students have failed to pass the class, and even others had dropped the class. I learned from this experience that if the university was willing to spend their budget to improve its classes, students would have done much more better in their exams.
In short, University should spend their budget on classes and library beacuse students need to get information. Moreover, they will also benefit from improving the classes. We should all support this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ties should spend their budget equally. While others diagree. In my view, though spor...
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Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'purchasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: purchasing
...nces that I needed. Therefore, I forced to purchase many books from private libraries off-c...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...ecause he is popluar team among others. as you can see, if the university should w...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...he university should would have cut-off some of the team budget and spend the ampount on im...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...hool, Many classes were filled with too much students. I remembered that one day, Th...
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Line 5, column 860, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... classes, students would have done much more better in their exams. In short, Universit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in short, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01991150442 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63610906304 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477876106195 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8997995906 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.76 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.08 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130871833769 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419865589526 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480965700501 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988148436416 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392925347499 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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