Many universities in the world invest a lot of money in extracurricular activities such as sports or social activities; on the other hand, other universities and colleges focus their budgets in libraries and better equipment for the classes. In my opinion, the financial support of universities and collages should be invested in social activities and sports as well as classes and libraries because students will gain new skills needed for their future life.
First, Supporting social activities will enable students to develop social skills such as leadership and group work that will help them to convey ideas effectively and efficiency. For example, Join a discussion group outside classes will allow students to have interaction with other students with differents points of views. Moreover, This social activity helps the student develop confidence in their ideas and also improve their leadership since they have to share thoughts with other people.
Second, Sports will let the student relax from the pressure of studies and also creates an enviroment of competitiviness that help the student improve themselves. For instance, to do a sport such as soccer or basketball not only help the student to be in good shape , but also permits him to be more focus in their studies since the pressure of final exams and projects is shortened by the physical activity.
Third, social activities and sports provides the student with confidence for future challenges such as looking for a job, giving an oral presentation , leading a group,etc. One example of the benefits in supporting social activities and sports is when a student has to face an interview. This event is not an easy job and many student tend to fail. However, if you have experince interacting with other people in social activities, an interview would seem easier since you learned to how to manage your words and ideas.
In conclusion, social activities and sports should receive the same amount of money since they help the students to develop certain characteristic for the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, third, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23564954683 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79987799632 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507552870091 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.5681349256 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.416666667 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5 5.45110844103 266% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179243279503 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811356721331 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503505698484 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114781123918 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515556658614 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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