TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

Today, a prevalent statement we hear a lot is that people are spending too much time on pleasure rather than doing things they should do. Because as we notice, people tend to travel around or go shopping, tasting in new restaurants these days. A considerable number of opponents, however, argue that people are just being more efficient in work and pay more attention to relaxation today. As far as I am concerned, the latter view seems to align more with my personal perspective. There are several reasons that support my point of view. However, the following two will suffice here.

To begin with, although people may work fewer hours a day than they used to, it does not equal saying that they do not spend enough time in what they should do. It is not fair for us to talk about this without taking efficiency into consideration. To be specifical, a man one hundred years ago may have to start with collecting wood when he tried to build a house. These kinds of jobs may cost him twelve hours of work every day due to the low productivity that time. This also results him no time to spend on personal enjoyment. However, today we use material manufactured in factories and construct with machines. In this case, even though we may need to work only eight hours a day, we indeed build more houses. That is also the ultimate purpose of the advance of science and technology: to free humanity from repeated and unproductive activity, which should be regarded as a development instead of being blamed.

For another, spending seemly more time on personal enjoyment will help improve people's efficiency, too. In a society with huge productivity, what matters more is not how much time we spend working on repeated tasks but on what great ideas we could come out with. Sometimes, a great idea may worth thousands of working machines. For example, in the earily period of exploration of the space, NASA may hire thousands of girls to perform accurate calculation. However, the idea of computer is so brilliant that these works could be done with a single click on a button. I bet these great ideas would not come from a scientist who is satisfied with the situation that ''people are hard-working and they spend twelve hours a day in calculation''. It will only come from a scientist who thinks we should figure out a way to free people from these works so that they can spend more time on relaxation. And there is no doubt that the latter kind of scientists rather than the former ones are the driven power behind the development of our society.

Admittedly, a minority of people may think that if people spend more free time on their study or their work, then they will be more success and the society will develop faster. However, what should be pointed out here is that, the aim of society development is allowing people to live a comfortable life and do the things they want instead of spending every minute on work.

For the reasons mentioned above, I disagree with the statement.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, for example, in fact, kind of, no doubt, to begin with, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69904761905 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55715544911 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502857142857 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6114480383 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.68 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278017018214 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802386488611 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118026870826 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174502441816 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601693601328 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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