TPO 1-1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
By and large, universities and colleges are the second house of students, they spend most of their time in these places. They find friends and share their experiences with them. They attempt to find their friends according to the common activities that they like to do for instance, in the sport, social activities or in the library. With this in mind, it is expected to notice that universities and colleges should make proper situations for students to find their friends. A plethora of people wonders, how the universities and colleges should divide the financial budget between classes or libraries and sports or social activities. A rather reoccurring idea states that sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. I concur with this idea, in what follows, two reasons will be investigated in support this idea.
Initially, sport and social activities are important for mental improvement of students. They need these activities for improving their mind and get more energy for continuing their projects. The brain will be bored after reading theories and calculating mathematics problems, so the students should take part in some activities to improve their brain. According to the recent research done at Tehran University, about 75 % of top students in various fields participate in sport and social activities, they have a more active brain than students who do not participate in any activities. The educational goal will be improved by providing better social and sport activities situations.
Second, sport and social activities are necessary for the physical improvement of students. Most of the student after two or three years have physical problems such as neck ache, they spend more than 8 hours behind the desk at a constant position and this plan for two or three years will be a reason for physical illness. They should spend 2-3 hours on sports activities such as swimming, running or volleyball in order to reduce the risk of physical illness. If students do not care about their health, they will not be succeed in their educational activities. For example, I had a bad headache during study last year. I went to the hospital and stayed there for one week, the doctor said me, the problem has occurred because I did not participate in any sports activities, so I lost some courses when I was in the hospital.
In conclusion, not only the social and sports activities are important for mental improvement of students but also it is crucial for physical improvement. They can do these activities in order to improve their education. Therefore, the universities and colleges should spend money on sport and social activities as equal as classes and libraries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 687, Rule ID: SAY_TELL[2]
Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
...d stayed there for one week, the doctor said me, the problem has occurred because I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13111111111 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78595317543 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9446405551 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.952380952 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237766546728 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980397181349 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101693547659 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177445931963 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832339867329 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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