Nowadays, the abundance of computer games available and accessible for children is a fact that cannot be denied. The idea of spending time playing those games is waste arises the idea of forbidding, not allowing, playing them. While there are enormous skills can be acquired from some computer games, in spite of a few negative effects, I personally disagree to forbid those games, and I don't think that playing them is a waste of time. In this passage, I will provide some of my points of views.
Firstly, children can acquire a wider perspective toward the unknown world, where they won't be able to visit in their entire lives, by playing an intelligently designed video game. Video games, thanks to today's high graphical interfaces, includes maps of big well-known cities that children can, virtually, walk place to place and witness the life in there. The imagination is also a big contribution of video games to children's lives. In fact, children like to imagine by previously seen games that talented design of combination of stories and landscapes. Therefore, playing computer games gives children the opportunity to have wider perspective by experiencing the unknowns.
Secondly, playing video games requires improved social skills, as well as, it provides making new friends around the world. Almost every online games employ chatting with other players, children can benefit foreign friends who live in a totally different culture. Children can not only improve foreign language skills but also experience how a native speaker would use a specific phrase in a specific situation. Furthermore, as multiple player playing would best with group work, players must have contact with each other and should have a division of labor which is a crucial consideration in society. Consequently, children can acquire important language and social skills by playing computer games.
Thirdly, some games may provide practicing advanced engineering knowledge to their players, such as Minecraft. Minecraft is an open-world game which build-up blocks, in the fact that block concept improves the ability to understand the objects by knowing their essential pieces. Children can build their houses and can understand the basic requirements of the objects, such as windows and ceiling, for example, windows needed to burn a sand block in an oven crafted by stones. Fortunately, the red stone blocks work as an electrical wire in the game, by an engineering knowledge of logic gates, children can design even a basic computer. My brother, as an example, had built a calculator in base 2, at the age of 12, with its screen to represent base 2 calculation in base 10.
In conclusion, although the playing computer game is considered as a waste of time, and should not be allowed, in my humble opinion, I think the opposite of the idea and support the fact that encouraging playing well-designed games is important. They will give the chance children to visit well known big cities and enlarge their imagination world. Additionally, online video games provide a medium to socialize and gain language skills. Lastly, future engineers would have confronted earlier in some practices of engineering knowledge thanks to Minecraft.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2715.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25145067698 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79699885608 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526112185687 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7023341309 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.043478261 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4782608696 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.17391304348 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2627765558 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799022366698 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694174755611 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162286545422 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660789540648 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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