TPO-12 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Academic subjects are very important part of students' lives. Students learn academic subjects by attending schools or colleges. Some would think that it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject; others would disagree. In my view, it is better to specialize in one specific subject than to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects for two important reasons.
The main reason is that you can learn more. When you study one specific subject, you can get depth knowledge or ideas about a particular topic. That way, you can learn more ideas and views of specific subject. For example, when I was in pharmacy school in India, I was in third year. I liked pharmacology subject. I knew other subjects well, but pharmacology subject was my favorite. I used to get high scores in every exam of pharmacology. That's why, I had decided to do my research work on anticancer drugs. During my research work, I read many books and articles on the topic. Also, I found out blogs online about pharmacological actions, drug interactions, and side effects of anticancer drugs. I increased my knowledge on that topic and also got depth knowledge about contraindications and uses of anticancer drugs. It was helpful to get high scores on my subject and I easily got accepted for master program. On the other hand, if I did select many academic subjects for my research work, I wouldn't be able to get depth knowledge because that's only about basic ideas and concepts. This example taught me that it is beneficial for us to specialize in one particular subject.
Another reason is that you can solve problems quickly. If you learn many academic subjects to get broad knowledge, you can have only general concepts about many subjects. This way, you can not find proper solutions for your problems. For instance, when my brother was working in a pharmaceutical company in India, he was working in a tablet production department as a junior scientist. He had broad knowledge about many academic subjects. He didn't focus on a particular subject when he was in college. One day, there was a problem in chemical reactions of two drugs in the production department. My brother was in charge of the department. He tried to find out solutions from his knowledge, but he couldn't. Then he talked to his colleagues about it. one of his colleagues had a huge knowledge about chemical interactions because he studied a specific subject for many years and got experiences. His colleague suggested two solutions for the problem and my brother applied it. Finally, he achieved desire results. My brother knew realized mistakes and got an idea about specialize in one particular subject. As I learned from this experience, it is necessary to specialize in one specific subject.
In sum, though some may oppose the plan, I strongly agree that it is better to specialize in one specific subject than to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects. Not only it helps to get depth knowledge but also helps to solve queries. Every person should specialize in one particular subject in life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, third, well, for example, for instance, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9165085389 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81202897535 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404174573055 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 28.0 9.59856630824 292% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0617087483 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.9722222222 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6388888889 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47222222222 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347164340342 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102724227204 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108172625303 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280614806186 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924739779818 0.0645574589148 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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