Over the past few decades, with the lightning speed of technological evolution, many companies have started making their huge profit through marketing their products. It has become a big business in the marketing field for many companies. In this regard, some people think advertisements are a reliable source to buy any products. However, others hold a different opinion that people should never buy products by looking through advertisements. From my perspective, the latter view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, the first reason that makes me hold the belief that marketing companies usually showcase very attractive and good-looking products to attract customers, however, they would try to mislead people by providing false information through various marketing tools like televisions, the internet, billboards, magazines, etc. On top of that, by using various marketing strategies like target customers, they would target a particular age group of people in order to sell more products. Needless to say, that none of the companies ever show their bad sides while marketing through those fake products. To elaborate this more, I would like to present one example to illustrate my viewpoint. I wanted to buy a specious car last year so that I could travel with my whole family. My brother suggested me to buy a Hyundai Swift car after looking through its advertisement on television showing that the car was very spacious and have a good carrying capacity. However, it was a very small car in reality when we actually went buying a car. Hence, marketing firms can easily misguide people to control their product’s sell.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is technology has played a paramount role in making these advertisements. To be more specific, companies take many actions to beautify their products in those advertisements where the companies would try to make their products look like a high-quality product even though it is not up to the mark of customer’s expectations. They use magnified and colorful pictures to make it more decent looking products. My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I have a very bad experience doing online shopping. Last month, I bought one dress through online shopping, and that was my first experience where I bought a dress for myself. When I got a dress, it was a totally low-quality product, despite the fact that it was shown as a very high-quality product on their website. As a result, it makes people pessimistic by presenting such, unreal information through various marketing tools.
All in all, contemplating all remarks, I firmly believe that most of the product’s advertisements are modified and are different from their original versions. This is because those products are showcased with exaggerated fake versions and because companies misinterpret their products to buyers in order to improve their product sales.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, however, if, look, so, while, as a result, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2526.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27348643006 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97251851149 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519832985386 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4096990259 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.25 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114967932897 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335626003783 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288039322696 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0787059371675 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185354190219 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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