TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans

Everyone want to excel in their job and stand out among peers they work with. You should feel comfortable going to job, and should not feel any burdon about how will I survive in job. Some people might think that ability to relate well with people is more important than studying hard in school. However, in my opinion studying hard is much more necessary to succeed in job.

First, study helps you develop essential skills required for job. I think, school life is important in developing foundation for your personality. For example, one of my friend from my first job at software company in India, she was good at speaking in front of people and was independent thinker. I used to think I want to be like her, when I asked her where she got all these skills? She explained, she used to participate in many activities like hosting culural event, volunteering for social work all those things helped get better at speaking n front of others and developing her own opinion about everything. That's why I think going working had in school is important for developing skills that will help you to succeed at job.

Second, study makes you aware about recent technology. With study you get to know about recent findings in arear of your interest, and you could use such information to bring good businees for company, you working with. For example, back in India, I used to work in sweet shop. I was working there at counter and my only job was to take payments from costomer. This shop had huge number of customers, and costomer queue for placing order was big. It was really difficult to manage so many people. I have done my under grad in computer science, I suggested them to start selling their product online and I created website for them. It really healed their business to increase profit by 60% and that too without having big crowd at shop.

All in all, I believe, studying hard at school is very imporatnt to get good job and succeed in your job. You do develop skills for connecting with people in your school since you have to go for many events that needs you to talk to your friends and communicate well.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'well', 'as to', 'for example', 'i think', 'in my opinion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.203349282297 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.203349282297 0.158761421928 128% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0813397129187 0.0866891130778 94% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0334928229665 0.046263068375 72% => OK
Pronouns: 0.112440191388 0.0685040099705 164% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.145933014354 0.118717715034 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0502392344498 0.0351676179071 143% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36543204517 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0454545454545 0.0309702414327 147% => OK
Particles: 0.00239234449761 0.00188951952338 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.0167464114833 0.0887237588012 19% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0143540669856 0.0209618222197 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0143540669856 0.0139019557991 103% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2122.0 2387.08602151 89% => OK
No of words: 379.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59894459103 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.298153034301 0.338922669872 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.200527704485 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.129287598945 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0712401055409 0.112833075102 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36543204517 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527704485488 0.524397521467 101% => OK
Word variations: 58.0704026894 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6684587814 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.95 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4431812831 48.84282405 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.1 120.699889404 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.55 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 39.0027704485 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.14383561644 1.45489161554 79% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430029806272 0.300154397459 143% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0950867434567 0.103427244359 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0847013532279 0.0752933317313 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.468566282523 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.131429033752 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162073961897 0.114077575197 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994391295898 0.0781384742642 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.352382700535 0.336927656856 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0383864456065 0.067059652881 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329419109008 0.210909579961 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846300848344 0.0618886996521 137% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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