There has been much discussion on the topic of whether for being successful a person should study hard or to be in good relations with people. In my perception, communications and connections with different people bring enormous benefit to the future career. I will explain my point of view by providing several examples.
First of all, people are all around us, and their influence on all aspects of our life is undisputable. By this I mean that attaining and sustaining good connections with people, which are significant in your subject is more valuable than excellent skills in it. For example, my close friend desired to get a job in one pharmaceutical company. She was going through plenty of job interviews. In the end, she didn’t get her desired job, because the assistant, who were inteviewing her was aquentied with another candidate, and this candidate got the job. In the light of the above, I belive that valuable connections are definitely important for you career growth not only because of getting preferences in a job interview, but also expanding your connections by successfully working in the group during the work process or by making agreements with other colleauges for bringing more benefit for you company and your status.
Secondly, expanding you professional communications will possibly influence positively on you career growth. For example, a person who wants to open his own business by getting important communications with some other businessmen can get an advice from them. I don’t want to say that everying in our career is determined by our connections. Otherwise, I suppose that, if you are a polite and smart person, people will prefer to work with you and communicate, for example making business together or promote you at work.
To wrap up, I eager to say that it is important to develop your soft communication skills and to make a good relations with people, which surround you. However, I think that we souldn’t forget about aquiering hard skills for doing our job better and better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...ons with some other businessmen can get an advice from them. I don't want to say tha...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'relation'?
Suggestion: relation
...communication skills and to make a good relations with people, which surround you. Howeve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i mean, i suppose, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08902077151 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98613938296 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569732937685 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1856087857 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.333333333 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241959684189 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074237371471 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485529592492 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146503277204 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172850119646 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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