Adulthood is an important stage of human’s life, which is highly affected by the previous stages of life such as adolescence. Thus, to prepare teenagers for their future role both the parents and the responsible organizations of society have to pay specific attention to these phases of life and do their best to build and improve teenagers’ skills.
One of the advantages of working as a teenager is that in this way not only are teenagers able to increase their experience and gain a wide variety of knowledge related to the job, but they can also build necessary skills and attempt to improve them. One of the skills which is highly nurtured by working outside is group working. Indeed, it is essential for adults to be able to work between themselves and work as a group by taking the responsibility of their own work. A practical example for which group working skill is essential is marital life, which requires the couple to appropriately divide duties between themselves.
In addition, acquiring a job gives teenagers the chance of making money which also has positive effects on their future success in two main ways. First, teenagers that get money from their parents without any effort, tend to be lazier than those who make money by working. Second, the limited amount of money paid to them teaches them to make balance between their expenses and income. As a result, by exercising this manner over and over every month they would definitely be able to do so in their own life, when they become independent from their families.
On the other hand, taking a part-time job parallel to studying adversely affects their academic grades and background. Indeed, when teenagers start to work parallel to studying at school, they have less time to study and have to adjust their time in a way to be able to both work and study; otherwise, they may get low grades at school. Some student take the job as an excuse to their low grades. According to a survey at the University of Tehran, the students’ average grade has shown a significant drop as a result of working besides studying.
In conclusion, I strongly assert that teenagers have to work as they study since the advantage of this view outweigh its mentioned disadvantage. In other words, working and studying at the same time help teenagers build skills which are necessary to be prosperous in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 351, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
... get low grades at school. Some student take the job as an excuse to their low grade...
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Line 9, column 265, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ls which are necessary to be prosperous in future.
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Line 9, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e necessary to be prosperous in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90147783251 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70309620853 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504926108374 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.964113134 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.375 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221700748152 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767924944587 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490932815962 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121908900141 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385583055714 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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