TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss a fascinating topic pertaining to T. rex's fossils, which is a dinosaur that was appeared in 70-million-year ago. The author of the passage gives details about the fossil. The lecturer casts serious doubts on the claims made in the article.
First of all, the author of the passage claims that the hollows in the leg bones show the presence of blood vessels. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that many bacteria colonized into those hollows. So, the soft organic substance inside the channels is the residue left by bacteria. Furthermore, he points out that it is not identical that this substance indicates that the animal has blood vessels.
Secondly, the reading passage discusses that the fossil contains some spheres in the leg bone of the animal. He argues that it clearly indicate the presence of red blood cells. This argument is rebutted by the speaker. He acknowledges that the iron material into the spheres did not indicate the presence of red blood cells. He elaborates on this by mentioning that other fossils which are from the same place did not contain red blood cells. Therefore, this iron material is something else.
Finally, the reading article posits that the presence of collagen in the fossil of the animal's leg bone. The professor, on the other hand, mentions that collagen in any animal remains only 1000 yr in their body, but the fossil is 70-million-years old. He puts forth to the idea that human skin contains collagen, so the collagen in the fossil may be of one of the researchers who hold the fossil's bone. Clearly, a disparity exists between the reading passage and the evidence exhibits by the lecturer.
In conclusion, the professor effectively casts doubt all the claims from the article.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...passage gives details about the fossil. The lecturer casts serious doubts on the cl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1500.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96688741722 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61665677538 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506622516556 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3976113741 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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