TPO-25 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Helping to your community is something that we all have to do for our favor. Occasionally, that mission is done by municipality, on the other hand, people who live in community do works. I am inclined to believe that young people share their time as much as old people do for community.
The first thing that year by year, companies demand more certificates to recruit employee and these all things make young people more busy to be qualified for their aimed job. Unfortunately, they have no time to spend for communities favor. However, I always see young people who clean garbage in parks on Sunday.
Moreover, technology of the INTERNET is a something that we cannot give up to check every 5 minutes especially twitter or facebook. Young people usually neglect their community and family. For example, my son is 6 years old who learnt reading this year and started using playstation. We used to clean garbage every Sunday and after he start using playstation, It is not possible to cut of his bond between he and his playstation. On the other hand, despite of addiction of social media on young people, Young people share blood donation news and organ donation news on the Twitter and some ones meet patients to make them happy.
What is more, we all grow up every year and our thoughts become more stable at all. After the 40 years old, we become a little bit stubborn about something like accusing young people in that they never help us for our community or neighborhood. For example, my father is an aggressive guy and never believe me about my charity program for homeless people. Last year, I took him to my company to show people who we give a temporary job to earn money than he believe me for a while.
To sum up, our modern world become harder day by day and consume all our energy. Some young people still try to help their community but that number of people decreased by hard life conditions.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to read'.
Suggestion: to read
...ample, my son is 6 years old who learnt reading this year and started using playstation...
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Line 3, column 335, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...clean garbage every Sunday and after he start using playstation, It is not possible t...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: BETWEEN_PRP[1]
Message: Incorrect form of the pronoun 'he'. Use: 'between him'.
Suggestion: between him
..., It is not possible to cut of his bond between he and his playstation. On the other hand...
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Line 4, column 120, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ll. After the 40 years old, we become a little bit stubborn about something like accusing ...
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Line 4, column 457, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'believes'.
Suggestion: believes
...e a temporary job to earn money than he believe me for a while. To sum up, our modern ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, while, for example, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63235294118 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5143102544 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0737923124 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6470588235 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145313785118 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590013638253 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558721404447 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991975256097 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059235113977 0.0645574589148 92% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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