No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of the role which parents play in people’s lives. Since the dawn of humanity, parents have had the heavy burden of raising children in a decent manner. When it comes to this point, it is the question of many individuals that whether parents today are more engaged in their children’s education than were parents in the past. Personally speaking, I believe that nowadays, parents care more about the education of their kids. In what follows, two reasons will be given to shed light on my response.
The first reason of note is that the civilization of societies has decreased the number of children in modern families, and parents can dedicate more time to raising a child. Traditionally, all members of a family had to work hard for long hours a day on farms, and in factories. As a result, children were seen as the labour force. By the advent of novel technologies and mechanization of tasks, the need to hard work to survive has diminished, children are not considered as the workforces, and the number of children per family has decreased. Therefore, children can concentrate on their education and parents can pay more attention to the children.
Another noteworthy reason which comes to my mind is that nowadays, parents are more concerned about their children’s future jobs, and they investigate vast amounts of money on the children’s education to prepare them for the future workplace. Education is becoming more and more expensive these days. The tuition fees of schools, universities extra-curricular courses have increased in past decades. Finding a decent job requires excellent preparation and specialized skills which can be gained through studying at universities. Parents want to make sure that their children have high chances in the fiercely competitive atmosphere of finding a secure and prosperous job. With this in mind, they try to provide the best opportunities to their kids.
To recapitulate, we can conclude that parents are more engrossed in children’s education. This is because education can ensure them that their children can find decent jobs in future, so they spend more money and time on preparing children for being prosperous in adulthood.
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- TOEFL T P O 3 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER
Message: Consider replacing "in a decent manner" with adverb for "decent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ad the heavy burden of raising children in a decent manner. When it comes to this point, it is the...
Line 8, column 179, Rule ID: IN_PAST
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...hat their children can find decent jobs in future, so they spend more money and time on p...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, therefore, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17166212534 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04483202924 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520435967302 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6899247968 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.444444444 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30751567472 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106421221814 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822092625177 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208113390328 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592603668737 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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