TPO 28 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate whether parents today are more involved in their children's education than were on the past. In my humble opinion, I believe that in today's generation parents has no time teaching their children with their studies. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, in this modern era parents attention are focused on creating money for their family. They are too busy with their hectic schedule at work and doesn't have time to teach their children when they are at home. As a result, child often study alone with out the supervisor of adults. Youngsters grades suffer because they don't have the proper guidance from their parents to help them study and finish their assignments. For instance, my sister Jacq works in a big company in Makati City, she has the position of general manager in their institution. My sister don't usually have time for her kids even for bonding and leisure activity because she is too tired to function at home. When Jacq is at home her office usually calls her and she immediately responds with their query because she is the boss in their company, approval and decision making comes thru her and she cannot refuse to help her company because it is her duty. Jacq has no time and luxury to teach my niece with her lessons in school and my niece suffer the most because she keeps on failing on school. It is very depressing to see that this instances are the real reality in our world today. Parents rarely has no time for their children education compared to the past generations.
Secondly, technology nowadays are continually evolving and inventions with educational materials are always available. Hence, because of technology parents rely on this advancement for their child to learn on their own. Computer application like logica which is a program build to help students to learn subjects from math, science and history. Parents are not shy to buy this products for their children to learn. But I think personal teaching is better compared to computer stimulated learning materials, it is because parents will know the weakness of your child and they can help their kid focus on that subject for to understand it much clearly.
To summarize, I believe that parents must focus their time and attention to their children's education. This is because technology and studying alone are not sufficient for them to understand their lessons properly. Kids need additional time and support from their parents for them to excel better in school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87816091954 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4510318523 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9952584541 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.047619048 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61904761905 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222118351087 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897233442295 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874025904169 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179152625487 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802855520209 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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