TPO 15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weight pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that they are always multiple variables to a truth. Some people believe that traveling your home country is beneficial than traveling foreign country. In my humble opinion, I disagree traveling in your own country has positive effects. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the majority of individuals would agree to the notion that traveling provides you with additional knowledge and learning in terms of their culture, art and literature. Moreover, traveling definitely provides you with experiences in life that you will remember forever. For example, this year we visited the country Japan I was so amaze with their cultural background, beliefs and way of life. Hence, the more I go to different places in Japan the more I am interested to know their history. I learned more about their history through their temples and monuments such as the Golden Pavillion, the palace is build in gold because all the people who live there are the most important persona in Japan and they want to make the emperor feel special that's why the place is adorned with gold. Also, Japanese people are very friendly and helpful to tourist even though they are not good in speaking in english they will go their way just to help you. All in all, by traveling to foreign country you will be aware of each and every tradition and beliefs system they follow.
Secondly, traveling makes people happy and a sense of accomplishment because they lived their lives to the fullest. Traveling the world is fulfilling and rewarding because you can see where your hard earn money is being put in to place and that is meeting people from all walks of life and enjoying your life to the fullest. Furthermore, going to places you haven't been before is exciting compared to exploring your own country which is boring and familiar to you. For example, me and my family visited Bangkok year 2010 and we are so happy to try their authentic thai cuisine and it is very delicious and mouthwatering. We wanted to try different foods that's why we chose to travel from different country rather than going to different provinces in the Philippines because the taste is all the same. Long story short, exploring different country will provide you with different prospective and experience because you are not accustomed on trying it.
To summarize this, I think that most people will agree to me that traveling other countries will be more exciting and fun because you can experience other traditions, festivities, way of life and taste their different delicacies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, after all, for example, i feel, i think, such as, all the same, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2326.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90717299578 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58500380165 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491561181435 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7971081219 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.421052632 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9473684211 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295486544475 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102346004518 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662732446452 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190443887241 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287551839325 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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