Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
There is no shortage of debates that traveling a lot of places help to relax in our modern complex world. While some people prefer travel mostly intheir own country, others usually go to foreign countries. Personally, I disagree with the idea that spending vacation in other countries is better than traveling my homeland. I feel thıs way for several reasons, which I will explore in my following essay.
To begin with, going to new countries, give a chance of meeting various cultures, which give us broad perspectives understanding world. Drawing my personal experience, when I went to the United States even within a couple of days I met plenty of people who were from different countries. After communicating with them I had better knowledge about their cultural events, I learnt some interesting facts about their languages. Even one of them were from Iran and I was suprised when he talked about their traditional holidays which are very similar with my country. Furthermore, althought my purpose was only traveling and relaxing within a few days, I learnt some new invested technology about my specialty, which inspired me to talk to my clinical deparment about bringing them to my country as well. Therefore, traveling different countries could gained us improved knowledge and wider perspectives rather than staying in your own country which has probably same stage of development.
Secondly, being in differnt countries enlarge your international network. When native people of that country encounter with a foreigner, they were mostly intererst with this person for obtaining information from his country, and hey know that foreigners do not have a lot of familiar circumstances around them, they try to help them, That is why, it makes it easier to communicate with them. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced my own experience. When I traveled the city of my country, in the restuarants waiters and natives of that city sometimes were not willing to tell about their cities. However in Antalya, one city of Turkey, when ordinary people heard our accent, they started to talk to us interesting facts about there and most famous places and most reliable transportation wways within city. In addition to this, I made a lot of new friends while getting information from them. Therefore, I gained new connections from various countries.
In the light of aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that traveling to foreign countries cause to discover new places, new cultures, improving person's world knowledge and enlarging network internationally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'gain'
Suggestion: gain
...re, traveling different countries could gained us improved knowledge and wider perspec...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mproved knowledge and wider perspectives rather than staying in your own country ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...not willing to tell about their cities. However in Antalya, one city of Turkey, when or...
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Message: Did you mean 'discovering'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: discovering
...at traveling to foreign countries cause to discover new places, new cultures, improving per...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21479713604 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89594905417 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546539379475 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.76179048 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.388888889 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2777777778 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28310067576 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904160476862 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599547953235 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1828512685 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444252347187 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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