TPO 28, independent
agree or not?
parents today are more involved in their kids' education than were parents in the past.
Success of offspring is the most significant and final wish and redemption of every parents since they always want the best for their children. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether nowadays, parents help their kids more in comparison with the past. From my point of view, I concur with this notion that they involve in their kids education more right now although the other opinion has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the followoing, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that they help them with their assignments and homework which definitely spoil them drastically. Moreover, they force their teachers (even threaten them) to make them improve in their schools. Nonetheless, in the past, there was a completely different scenario that parents, especially in my country, Iran, used to punish their own kids beacuse of their lack of improvement in their studies. To put it into a more vivid picture, my cousin, Ali, is a high school student who is used to running away from school and playing videogames instead of reading his textbooks. His father, Farhad, is supportive and always fights with his principle, Mr Ahmadi. Regardless of forcing his own kid to study harder, Farhad once had a fist fight with him, simply because Ali could not pass his Arabic final exam. So long as parents support their kids in all dimensions, the kids will not be able to become independent and successful.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that today's parents tend to spend a lot of money for the development of their childeren which was not a trend in the past, i.e. in my generation. In the past, we could not even dare to ask for a simple pencil eraser; in contrast, the students of this generation (known as Gen-Z) spend a preponderance amount of money on supplement books and fancy stationary stuff. Additionally, their parents spend as much as they can for supplement classes for the big entrance exam in Iran, Konkoor. Comparing with the past, we only had our school books to read for Konkoor, albeit enthusiastically, but students nowadays have at least 3 additional books and booklets for each major without which they cannot even pass their own school quizzes. This amount of support comes from the budget of their parents who beileve their kids are the future Einsteins.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I think parents are helping their kids more in comparison with the past in spite of the fact that there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my beliefs, parents not only support their kids and force their teachers (even fight with them) in order to improve them in school but also are used to spending scores of money on luxury stationary products as well as extra classes and books for helping their kids in Konkoor. Providing that this notion continues, it will have negatively affected students by the time they become adults because of being spoiled.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, nonetheless, regarding, second, so, thus, well, at least, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 532.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96992481203 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69032180615 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501879699248 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.3637936793 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.2 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270245207549 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911383017694 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780045515505 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186349020787 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290053308223 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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