TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When thinking about the issue that parents nowadays are more involved in their kids' education than were parents in the past, varied individuals will diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that since the salaries of parents today have largely increase, so they tend to get involved more in their youngsters' education and ensure that they can have a good academic performance. However, from where I stand, parents currently devote less of their time to their posterities' study, since they are fully occupied and the learning mediates are ample for kids to study without parents' accompany.

First and foremost, nowadays the overwhelming majority of metropolitans require a high living cost. And parents are under fierce competition, they need to work very hard to meet their families' expenditure. In such a circumstance, it is onerous for them to instruct youngsters' assignments simultaneously. Take my farther as an example. My farther possesses a decent job with a high wage, but the price is he has to work a long time everyday. And he usually comes home after eight o'clock P.M. In this way, he gets very tired thus it can be a ordeal for him to guide my homework after such a arduous working experience. Parents are prone to take a rest rather than instruct their children's education since the live expenditure rapidly increases.

Furthermore, thanks to the development of Internet, individuals currently have more access to knowledge. Students can search the information that them do not understand in Internet easily, in this condition it is unnecessary for parents to guide their kids' study since referring to online material and literature is more efficient. For instance, I hardly ask my farther about the problems I encounter in study, rather I will search the expertise which I need online first for these will only cost me few minutes then I can attain answers. Since the mediates for learning are much more plentiful than they were in the past, parents nowadays do not need to get involved in youngsters' education.

In a nutshell, not only do parents have to cope with their hectic work tasks, but also kids can study on their own through various mediates. Therefore, I strongly endorse that parents today do not need to devote their time to their children's education.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'increased'.
Suggestion: increased
... salaries of parents today have largely increase, so they tend to get involved more in t...
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Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...the price is he has to work a long time everyday. And he usually comes home after eight ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: o'clock
.... And he usually comes home after eight oclock P.M. In this way, he gets very tired th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... way, he gets very tired thus it can be a ordeal for him to guide my homework aft...
^
Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...for him to guide my homework after such a arduous working experience. Parents are...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04232804233 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75256382265 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507936507937 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1404353645 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.125 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.625 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237412125842 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878614693656 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822610737554 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165120012205 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618733956918 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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