When thinking about the issue that should people take a secure job right away, if they have the chance to get one, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that they should take the job for it is a good opportunity and if they miss it, they presumably will not able to find such a good job. However, from where I stand, we should wait for a more suitable job rather than taking a secure one, because we should pursue the job we are interested in or have more talent.
First and foremost, when we are searching for a job, we should pay more attention on the job itself rather than the adjunct things the job possess. And only working on a job which we cherish or we have talent in will enable us to attain further success. The adjunct values such as wage, status and stability have no benefits to our future career except promising us a high living standard. To achieve something greatness, we should focus more on wether the job fit us. Take my elder brother who now is a professor in Sichuan University as an example. My brother once had a opportunity to be a manager of research department in a foreign enterprise. Nevertheless, he rejected it which is much securer and more high-paid than being a professor. And later he told me the reason why he refused the job was he did not like to coordinate the tasks among employee rather he enjoyed doing experiments and doing research is where his aptitude is. Now he has published several articles on renowned journals. From this story, we draw a conclusion that it is more likely to succeed by doing a job we prefer more.
Furthermore, it is negative for our working efficiency to do a job we are not good at, and we may even feel frustrated and exhausted though the job is more secure. We may encounter far more hurdles when we are tackling a task. And if we do not have adequate expertise and interest, we presumably will get tired and frustrated soon, as a result, it will largely influence our working efficiency. For example, if I get a mission to compile news which I am not familiar with, I probably will give up soon cause it vexes me. Therefore, a secure job may also mean labyrinth and bothersome which can significantly affect our stamina.
In a nutshell, not only is it adverse for our working enthusiasm, but also may be a obstacle for our success. Thus I strongly dissent from taking a secure right away we meet it, rather we should wait to seek the job that we adore.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...sity as an example. My brother once had a opportunity to be a manager of research...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...our working enthusiasm, but also may be a obstacle for our success. Thus I strong...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...also may be a obstacle for our success. Thus I strongly dissent from taking a secure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49553571429 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57545180676 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506696428571 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8067454299 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.7 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329749140435 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109434421418 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073176748741 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229880199439 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867823653323 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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