TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Nowadays the job market offers jobs with different work week hours schedule. Some people prefer to have a part-time job for different reasons, for example, child caring or invalid relative. Others prefer to have a full-time job and have the weekends off. Personally, I would prefer to work only three days a week for long hours, I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.

First of all, I always preferred to work full-time because of course, I can have a higher stipend, but this means that you have less time for yourself and for your hobbies and social life, therefore have the possibility to shorten the work-week even this means to work for longer hours would give me the possibility to have more time for my personal life. I have always been very dedicated in my job and often I work extra hours in order to finish my tasks, therefore work more hours in exchange of more free time in the week would be for a person like me.

Secondly, have more free time will give me the possibility to learn new skills related to my job and this, in turn, will lead me to be more efficient at work and able to greatly bring on my daily work tasks. My experience is a compelling example of this, when I was working as a photographer for an e-commerce, my job was based on the quantity and quality of photos taken every week rather than an hourly pay, this gave me the possibility to tackle my job independently, so I choose to work on shooting on Mondays, Thursdays and Wednesdays and I take the Thursdays and Fridays to attend photography and design courses, this gave me the opportunity to improve my skills and I gained a company higher position and my stipend increased a lot.

In conclusion, based upon my personality and dedication to my job I would prefer to work for longer hours and shorten the work week because in this way I will have more time for my personal life and attend course in order to improve my skills and the chance to get a better job or a higher position, which for me it very important for my career.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, of course, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45382585752 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5093249972 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451187335092 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.1344086022 209% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 145.810463815 48.9658058833 298% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 187.555555556 100.406767564 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.1111111111 20.6045352989 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.0 5.45110844103 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323169641364 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180409249549 0.076458572812 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551686983016 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23521758928 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811885314837 0.0645574589148 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 11.7677419355 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.77 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.42 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.0537634409 187% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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