TPO-32 - Integrated Writing Task Starting in the 1960s and continuing until the 1980s, sailors in Russian submarines patrolling the North Alantic and Arctic Ocean would occasionally hear strange sounds. These underwater noises reminded the submarine crews

The reading and the lecture both debate about strange underwater sounds detected by sailors in Russian submarines. The author of the readings thinks that there are three explanations, whereas the lecturer argues that these reasons are not sactisfactory.

First of all, the author mentions that the strange noises could be the sounds emitted by Orca whales males to actract the the female during the courtship ritual. The lecturer casts doubt on this theory and explains that is highly unlike, because even these animals are present in the North Atlantic and Artic Ocean, they live near the surface and not at the depth where this sounds were registered by submarine sonars.

Second, the author proposes that these sounds are caused by giant squid,he believes that there is a possibility that these smart animal have the ability to emit sound, but they do not have skeleton and their soft bodies cannot be detected by sonars. the lecturer rebuts this claim, she notes that the squids disappeared for two decades before 1980's, and according to her there is no reason to reapper 20 years later.

Finally, the author suggests that that the sounds could be come from foreign submarines which use a kind of tachnology designed to be undetectablle by sonar. the lecturer puth forth the idea, she feels that this theory cannot holds up because the today submarines annot move as fast as the sound registered. furthermore, today technology is not so advanced to make submarines to not be detected by sonar.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The reading and the lecture both debate about strange underwater sou...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...emitted by Orca whales males to actract the the female during the courtship ritual. The...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...emitted by Orca whales males to actract the the female during the courtship ritual. The...
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Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , he
...t these sounds are caused by giant squid,he believes that there is a possibility th...
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Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ft bodies cannot be detected by sonars. the lecturer rebuts this claim, she notes t...
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Line 7, column 30, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
... later. Finally, the author suggests that that the sounds could be come from foreign s...
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Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... designed to be undetectablle by sonar. the lecturer puth forth the idea, she feels...
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Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'submarines'' or 'submarine's'?
Suggestion: submarines'; submarine's
...heory cannot holds up because the today submarines annot move as fast as the sound registe...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...t move as fast as the sound registered. furthermore, today technology is not so advanced to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, second, so, whereas, kind of, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 22.412803532 116% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 30.3222958057 89% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1257.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 250.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.028 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46162547923 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 419.366225166 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2765438638 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.666666667 110.228320801 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7777777778 21.698381199 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 4.19205298013 215% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414942302076 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158243740303 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828647203768 0.0662205650399 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225592561016 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749135191798 0.0443174109184 169% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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