Satisfaction is the feeling when people are being entertained either physically or mentally, which results in a sense of happy. It seems that, as the world develops, the lower demands can be easily satisfied whereas the upper demands grow, and people are hard to please. But that is a myth.As a matter of fact, in a world changing more rapidly, people tend to become satisfied much more easily.
As the social productivity promotes, the living qualities have far been better. More and more people around the world do not need to worry about where the next meal comes, or how to make it through the winter. My father lived at the countryside in his childhood and has seven siblings. The best time for them around the year was the wedding, when they could share a fish together. The only motif for him to study was the lunch at the school, which, of course, was no better than simply porridge. Meanwhile, studying saved him from working in the field. Nowadays, we have machineries in the field; we have to worry about the waste foods. Moreover, the advanced medical cure offers people happiness. Vaccines prevent us from illness. People are completely immune to those once lethal disease like smell pox. Some of the curing processes have become painless. Thus we would become happier even though when we are ill. The time when our living demands could narrowly be met have passed, and people are physically surely more satisfied.
Furthermore, along with the increasing upper demands, the entertainments vary as well. Thanks to the developments of the technology, people have come up with all sorts of ways for the entertainment, like the Play Stations, the sports facilities, the Internets, etc. Twenty years ago, we could only play some card games or watch TV, while we can travel around the world and surf on the Internet today. The number of Chinese travelers this year has grown to 120 million people, ten times as the number five years ago. The VR tech can virtualize your craziest fantasy, allowing you to befriend the Captain America or confront the aliens. Numbers of social networking applications like Twitter or Facebook have united us together, sharing other families daily life. The technology has finally changed the world into Neverland where no one grows up and lives happy.
To draw a conclusion, in a world that is rapidly changing, we are offered a variety of brand-new experiences and highly evolved products. The advance in physical and mental life will provides people with a happier life. So although some believe that people are less happy than before, I deem we are more satisfied in such a changing world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, while, of course, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90604026846 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52303770521 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590604026846 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 13.0 3.08781362007 421% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7045113129 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3461538462 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1923076923 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184123795256 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465861047733 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547234692478 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128036760967 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551617209388 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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