Nowadays, people do not enjoy what they have in their homes such as a family, a child's smile, or even a dog. This quick world has changed how they live and made them less conscious of the valuable things they have. As far as I am concerned, people in today’s world are less happy than in the past. I cling to this outlook because of two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the world has become more competitive, so people need to keep up with its rhythm and work as much as they can. Now, there are some people who normally work between 16 to 20 hours how do they enjoy their life? What about their families? To clarify my point, let me take myself as an example, a year ago I was studying so hard in order to get a scholarship, I could stay up killing books and practicing exercises. As this test was at a national level all the students in my country needed to take it as well, so it turned in a really competitive situation. After several weeks, I sat the test and got one of the best scores. What I want you to notice from my example is that today, since the younghood or even childhood you should make your best effort if you want to achieve success. Therefore, you cannot enjoy the pleasures of life at all.
Secondly, technology has given us a bunch of new positive and negative things to use, however, how people are using it is damaging relationships and in-person conversations which are valuable characteristics of life. For instance, my cousin likes to be stuck the whole day in his Ipad. I am not of the idea that he does not utilize his tablet for a while, but if he is playing all day on it, there is an actual problem! Instead, he could be doing some exercise, playing any sport, or having a conversation with someone. This shows us how technology has created a virtual world in which there are no more truly smiles, love, or enjoyment as in past times.
To sum up, I strongly believe that today, people are less happy and satisfied than in the past because of competitiveness which is a jail for our real feelings, and because of technology which is a new world where you cannot find anything true.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39800995025 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52990822616 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557213930348 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8085087836 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6470588235 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233384169491 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680915262681 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060614376747 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145802414692 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619964590513 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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