TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

To begin with, nowadays technology advancement such as visualization helps children learn better that in the past. In fact, student can experience richer and lively study materials with current technology. For example, in biology class, children can see moving animals and environment in video on internet, compared to only drawing and photos study materials in the past. As a result, children are more exited and involve in the study. It is clear that today’s technologies facilitate education.
Furthermore, though children in this generation spend a lot of time on cell phone and internet, children in the past spend much time in their hobbies too. Despite generations, young people spend plenty of their time in hobbies and relax activity. Therefore, adaptation of type of activities is not impact student’s academic learning. In fact, research claims that some online games help children make decision better. For instance, Soduku is one of the popular game among children that the game require children to perform mathematic skills.
Finally, although cell phone, games, social networking can distracted children from study, they can learn more through this online platform. Online platforms connect the whole world and bring knowledge that could be inaccessible to many local. To illustrate, many developing countries have fewer libraries than developed countries, some countries might have none library or enough books about what students looking for. Therefore, children can benefit from unlimited knowledge and electronic books available in online community.
Due to aforementioned ground, all people should bear in mind that education can benefit from technology advancement, and bring richer knowledge to schools. It is clear that children spend much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking; however, these activities have not make education more difficult task.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 91, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...h as visualization helps children learn better that in the past. In fact, student can ...
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Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun local seems to be countable; consider using: 'many locals'.
Suggestion: many locals
...knowledge that could be inaccessible to many local. To illustrate, many developing countri...
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Line 4, column 285, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'made'.
Suggestion: made
...ing; however, these activities have not make education more difficult task.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, however, if, look, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63414634146 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79999358288 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595818815331 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8170263283 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0625 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9375 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256541619398 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795591137122 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0913326641305 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156301077759 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569515186159 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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