TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

Currently, there is a big debate among people who are within the educational field, there are contrasting opinions about the effects of the modern technology on children education. Some teachers believe that children are negatively affected by technology because it takes most of their lifetime, other teachers, instead, think that the modern technology offers the possibility to use new and more effective methods of teaching. Personally, I believe that the internet gives the opportunity to develop new skills and new methods of both teaching and learning, therefore I do not consider that educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.

First of all, since now children spend most of their time using smartphones and social networks, the education about how to use them in the right way is crucial. The internet is the broadest basin of knowledge that humans have never had, therefore, teachers can use it to teach children things that were not possible in the past. For example, during a history class, they can use books as basic reference, but they can enrich their lessons showing online videos about the specific historical event or find different opinions about what is being taught, in this way they can stimulate a discussion about it, and consequently make their lessons more compelling and interesting. In the past, instead, teachers used only one source, paper books, which it is well known to have just a point of view and only very few photos. I consider this as a limitation in educating children.

Secondly, books are very expensive and take a lot of space; the use of tablets at school gives the opportunity to have all the material in one device. Consequently, the children backpack became lighter and this has reduced most of the problems related to the wrong posture, or carrying heavy weights. My own experience is a compelling example of this when I was at primary school, I remember that every school day I had to bring at least 4 books and all the other school stuff, such as pencil case, dairy, and notebooks, it was very heavy. As result of this, I had a serious problem with my back, and the doctor said that I had to avoid to carrying heavy weights, so my parents had to carry my backpack until my school changed policy and decide to buy tablets. From that moment, we could use tablets at home for homework and leave the heavy paper books in the classroom, from that moment I could go to school by bus as my schoolmates and I felt very confident and keen to use the digital books, much more fun than the paper book.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that as long as children are supervised and educated at the right use of techs, such as smartphones, the internet, and social networking websites, they are very powerful teaching instruments. Modern technology can enrich the lessons and give access at the biggest source of knowledge, this was not possible in the past where the only way to learn was through paper books, therefore, in my opinion, nowadays educate children is easier than it was in the past.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2618.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 546.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79487179487 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60247581262 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492673992674 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.7395462768 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.625 100.406767564 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.125 20.6045352989 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171389003595 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593961044137 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514937302878 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114136270881 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471546669733 0.0645574589148 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 11.7677419355 155% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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