TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading and the lecture are both about the adoption of electronic medical records by doctors instead of use paper records. The Author of the reading believes that the electronic records are beneficial for several reasons, whereas, the lecturer casts doubt on the claim made in the reading. She thinks that electronic records are likely to bring any advantages.

First of all, the author points out that the use of electronic will lead to a decrease in the cost of keeping paper records, because electronic records take virtually no storage space and they will reduce the cost of copying, faxing and transferring paper records, when they are required by doctors working in different location. This point is challenged by the lecturer. She says that this is unlike to happen because doctors as long electronic records will continue to keep paper records for backup and for a legal purpose such as the original signature.

Secondly, the author contends that digital archives are more reliable because reducing the human error when the papers are improperly transcript or same have illegible handwriting. the lecturer rebuts on this arguments. She suggests that it is not possible to limit the mistakes because in addition to digital records doctors usually take hand notes which will be attached to digital files, therefore there is always a possibility to have a human error.

Finally, the author states that the electronic records will help the research. the reading explains that digital archives will provide a source of data already formatted for statistical purpose. the lecturer, on the other hand, posits that this is will not be beneficial for research. She puts forth the idea that it is not easy to access to those databases because they are protected by the privacy laws, therefore if patients do not give the permission that data will remain not available

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
...ipt or same have illegible handwriting. the lecturer rebuts on this arguments. She ...
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Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
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Suggestion: these
...ble handwriting. the lecturer rebuts on this arguments. She suggests that it is not ...
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Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: The
...ctronic records will help the research. the reading explains that digital archives ...
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...eady formatted for statistical purpose. the lecturer, on the other hand, posits tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, in addition, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 307.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12052117264 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5619135823 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511400651466 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 500.4 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.9031124832 49.2860985944 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.923076923 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06452816374 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412569510363 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1457625345 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110610310152 0.0662205650399 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249966170667 0.162205337803 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920901616178 0.0443174109184 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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