TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Unfortunately, I have to agree with the statement. I always had full respect for my teachers as my parents educated me, but nowadays it seems that teachers have a secondary role in our society.
I believe this because, more and more often, news on TV or on the internet tell us about episodes which students are violent or disrespectful towards their professors. For example, last week there was this video posted on Facebook where a fourteen boy wearing a motorbike helmet was screaming and insulting his professor who was trying to interrogate him, though the worst thing was that everybody else was laughing at this act of bullying. The reaction of the rest of the classroom made me think that probably the new generation has lost the consideration that their teachers deserve.
This situation totally contrasts with my experience, when I was a student I always saw my teachers as important and valuable figures, even when they were severe and were not giving me the votes that I wanted. Above of all I never insulted them or argued with them because they were doing their duty, and none of my schoolmates protested for being interrogated. Furthermore, we all were aware that our parents would have blamed us for a negative judgment from the teachers, as consequence of this we all were fear them. Nowadays instead, if a teacher gives a punishment or a warning to a student in order to make him or her reflecting on his or her mistakes, most of the parents would blame the teacher rather than their children, I firmly believe that this is profoundly wrong and have a negative educational impact on the next generation.
This new tendency probably is due to the fact that internet seems have brought in our life all the knowledge that we need, and the younger parents tend to underestimate the educational role of teachers. However, the reality is that even we have the illusion to know everything through the internet; an advanced and civil society cannot rely only on this superficial and incomplete knowledge but have to be based on real people with experience and large knowledge of topics and teaching strategies. My point of view is that a computer will never competes with a frontal lesson with a real person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 504, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...teachers, as consequence of this we all were fear them. Nowadays instead, if a teach...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83769633508 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76140167626 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552356020942 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5041756304 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109208773309 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505651874219 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407363523816 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681913380759 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342086600523 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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