The most effective strategy used by parents to encourage their children is rewarding them for their achievements, support them when they fail and punish them when they have a wrong behavior. There is not a universal reward nor there a unique punishment, the right option is upon both on parents and children characters. Personally, I believe that money as long as it is used to buy good things are the best way to reward children for their achievements in school. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, money is the best reward because they can be turned into any kind of thing, in this way a child must think about what to buy or maybe he or she can decide to save the money to buy something more valuable in the future. My own experience is a compelling example of this, when I was at primary school I remember that I was very motivated to get high marks because my parents would have rewarded me with a little of money. What I really desired was a new bike. It was too expensive to buy it with just one reward, though! Then I decided to save the money until I got the right amount to buy a new bike, it took me an entire school year, in this way my parents taught me not just to be motivated in getting high marks, but also the constancy in what I was studying.
Secondly, managing money and decide what to buy with it is a very effective way to learn the value of it, which is a new skill for a child. Usually, Children receive what they need and what they want from their parents and most of the time they do not know how many sacrifices their parents did to get what they desired or needed. Managing money helps children to learn to the adult world and be more aware of where all the tangible and intangible things they have are coming from. For instance, when finally I reached the amount of money needed to buy a bike, I choose the cheapest one, because I wanted to save some money to buy a new pencil case and a diary, what I learned was to use my money in an efficient way.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents should reward their children for their achievement at school with money, as long as they teach them how to use it and support them to spend that money for good thing. This is a good way to motivate children to work hard in school and at the same time, they can learn the important skill of managing money, preparing them for the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 698, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ary, what I learned was to use my money in an efficient way. In conclusion, I strongly believe t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.29067245119 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30286229399 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438177874187 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.6564310926 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.285714286 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9285714286 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27524961569 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110348797818 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690766632943 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196459842576 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497692523803 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.19 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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