It is a big question for today's world as most of the parents are very much worry about their children education. Even though some people will argue that students learn many things from using the cell phone, playing online games, and spending time on social networking site, I do not think this way. I personally agree with the arguments that it is so tough to educate children for their parents. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin, students spend less effective time for studying their main books. This is a pick season of the modern age when lots of invention help us to acquire our necessary elements in the quickest time. But these innovations also have very bad influence in our lives and the worst effect may be applied to young people who like to know everything in no time. As a result, they spend their valuable time by using those technologies and he has very little time to complete academic activities. For instance, I have a niece who is going to primary school now. Recently, I went my village home where my brother along with his family live. I was astonished by the activity of my niece; she spends his whole evening time by cheating with her friends and even at night which is mainly considered as the time for reading. Then I asked her how she completed class assignment. In reply, she said that she never completed whole assignment. She also stated that her parents were so worried about her because of her wasting time. So, this example properly illustrated the condition of modern time children.
Secondly, young people are becoming weak day by day; they are less physically strong than the previous generation. Since they involve with many other online or offline activities on the internet, they do not get enough time for physical exercise which is very important to build a sound psychological condition. As they are losing their capacity for thinking and creating something new, it creates a situation of forgetting everything that they read. As a result, their parents have to work hard with them. As I said in the previous para about my niece, the exact same thing is being happened to her. My brother told me that she was not able to concentrate her reading and other activities which made them worry. They annoyed because she forgot everything. And when they consult with the family doctor the doctor identified the reason behind her failure to remember and that was exactly what I said. So, technology made harder to educate children.
In conclusion, we take some initial steps to protect our children from being a disabled citizen. And I it is obvious that the technology changes the education system both positive and negative ways
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 508, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ir parents have to work hard with them. As I said in the previous para about my ni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8025477707 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48125667895 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556263269639 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1464936036 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1153846154 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227718453698 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588187413451 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463555469128 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133615395488 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694954539786 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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