Celebrities all over the world are one of the most susceptible ones to privacy violations. Their privacy is usually challenged by the press and the fans. To protect celebrity privacy, some governments set up specific laws for protecting them and I totally have a penchant for the idea of setting this policy due to the fact that they deserve to have a private life, as other human beings do. There are many reasons for that, among which the human rights and the opportunity of some people's thriving are the most noticeable ones.
To begin with, it is worth mentioning one of thirty articles of The Universal Declaration of Human rights called "Freedom from interference with privacy, family and home" which is practical for all human kinds, and celebrities are no exception. While everyone should have the right to withhold the information they may be unwilling to disclose to the public, celebrities and public figures usually have to deal with stalking and harassment by the paparazzi who want to make commercial use of their private data, and by the fans who might sometimes commit serious offenses such as breaking into their houses and injuring celebrities and even their families. Celebrities are just normal people who try to motivate and entertain people in varied ways, and letting them live in peace is the easiest thing that the whole society can do to show their gratitude toward them.
Secondly, there are many talented people, having inherent abilities in varied realms such as sports, theater, and public speaking all of which resulted in one's getting famous when he or she reaches the zenith of it. Many of these talented people may be afraid of the subsequent risks of getting famous which could affect their lives and their families'. Therefore, they will not thrive in their career and probably cannot be the best version of themselves in the shadow of fear. However, since many people, especially teenagers, take celebrities their primary role models, some disclosed information on private aspects of celebrities' lives can prevent the fans from developing unrealistic viewpoints of these role models which sometimes can be bad influences. Nevertheless, these merits do not outweigh the above demerits of harassing public figures' privacy.
To sum up, celebrities, in all fields of activity from art to sport, should have the right to have a private life and it is up to the people and the media to understand this human right and respect their privacy, and by doing so provide a more decent environment for celebrities to prosper and flourish.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 156, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ublic speaking all of which resulted in ones getting famous when he or she reaches t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2152.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06352941176 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67983783014 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536470588235 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.6783234487 48.9658058833 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.538461538 100.406767564 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6923076923 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13304397129 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478148463409 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366723496264 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913114445432 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281451279922 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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