TPO 37 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets dogs cats or other animals although there are better uses for this money Use specific reasons and example

The debate over the claim that an increase in number of tasks done by an individual may interfere with reduction of efficiency and performance has always been on the table. From my perspective, this assertion can be true because of two main reasons, which I will demonstrate in following essay.

To start, when a person is involved in more than one task, their brain should process a lot of diverse matters all at once. Researchers have shown that human brain is much more precise when its focusing on one task at a time. For instance, when you are listening to a lecture while writing an essay on some other topic, you have a higher chance to grasp less proper data from the lecture and hand in an essay with less quality. The reason I also feel this way is because on time I was cooking and studying simultaneously, and each time I started to rap my head around my studies my brain tended to remind me to check the seasoning or to stir to avoid burning the food. Based on that experience, although I tried doing to tasks with each other, I associated more time and the overcome achievement turned out to be a disaster.

Furthermore, engaging in many things may cause the person to become fatigue and anxious. Being stressed or tired can have a large impact on what you accomplish or how well you can perform. Based on that, multitasking can cause insufficient outcome from the person conducting the task n an indirect way. For example, imaging someone attempting to finish three assignments moving from one to another at the same time. When she leaves on assignment to complete another it will take her some time to focus and remember what parts of the new one still need work. In the meanwhile, she may get anxious about the parts of the previous assignment she left behind. Worrying that she may not be able finish all of them in time. It is obvious that aside from helping the person multitasking can cause more damage than repairment.

To sum up, I strongly feel that getting tasks done one at a time is much more efficient and less time consuming while comparing overall performance. I claim this because the lack of brain's ability to process more than one task and the fact that handling different things will bring anxiousness and fatigue for the performer.

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Average: 8.4 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 192, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...t human brain is much more precise when its focusing on one task at a time. For ins...
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Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...uality. The reason I also feel this way is because on time I was cooking and studying simu...
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Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'attempts'.
Suggestion: attempts
...irect way. For example, imaging someone attempting to finish three assignments moving from...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, may, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6476426799 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56583361616 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535980148883 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0444097997 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.176470588 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7058823529 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104108456153 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341244756023 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282489601628 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661428084309 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313271684875 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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