All parents hope their children to have an outstanding academic performance at schools, so they try different ways to encourage children to work hard. Some parents come up with the idea of giving children money for achieving high grades. It may sound feasible; however, after a closer look, I find this method problematic and even deleterious to children's longer term development.
First, giving children money as a prize for high marks is very misleading. It is because that motivation for studying should come from the inner aspiration for knowledge rather than material desires. While I concede that many people go to school so that they can earn more money in the future, I do believe that there are more reasons for people to learn, like self-perfection and self-actualization. Thus, when children are repeatedly getting money from their parents for acting some examinations, gradually, they may get used to the feeling that studying is just for making more money. This is definitely not healthy to their growth, as well as the future of any nation.
Second, such awarding method will also affect children's character and behaviors adversely. Commonly, children like to have some pocket money, since they can use them to buy things they want. If they find out it is a good way to obtain extra money by getting high marks, it is possible that some will do whatever they can even in some despicable ways to bring home highly-graded papers. For instance, a negative phenomenon like cheating and plagiarism can be frequently seen on campus. Therefore, giving children money for high scores will only encourage such behaviors.
Actually, there are many other ways for parents to award their children for their excellent academic performance. For example, instead of giving children money directly, parents can buy things their children want for them, like new iPods or books. Or parents can take their children to an amusement park or a movie. In these ways, parents can award their children for good performance at school while avoiding some unhealthy influences.
In conclusion, I seriously doubt the effectiveness and rightness of giving children money for high grades at school. Not only children's attitude towards study will be compromised, it will also bring about counterproductive results on their behaviors.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1897 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.059 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.077 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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All parents hope their children to have ...
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...o childrens longer term development. First, giving children money as a prize ...
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...as well as the future of any nation. Second, such awarding method will also a...
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... will only encourage such behaviors. Actually, there are many other ways for ...
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... avoiding some unhealthy influences. In conclusion, I seriously doubt the eff...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244019138756 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.150717703349 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0837320574163 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0693779904306 0.046263068375 150% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0645933014354 0.0685040099705 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126794258373 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0430622009569 0.0351676179071 122% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84053954186 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0334928229665 0.0309702414327 108% => OK
Particles: 0.00239234449761 0.00188951952338 127% => OK
Determiners: 0.0598086124402 0.0887237588012 67% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0358851674641 0.0209618222197 171% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00239234449761 0.0139019557991 17% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2349.0 2387.08602151 98% => OK
No of words: 375.0 408.028673835 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.264 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.365333333333 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28 0.251872472559 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210666666667 0.174417080927 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133333333333 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84053954186 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 58.7965471287 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6684587814 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7368421053 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.007421696 48.84282405 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.631578947 120.699889404 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.894736842105 0.644075263715 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 47.7368421053 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.45378151261 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309140145935 0.300154397459 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.091546714302 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0871119531557 0.0752933317313 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514671639464 0.497263757937 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.127862074032 0.151897553556 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111500354799 0.114077575197 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540312791522 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.234953833936 0.336927656856 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0490656471695 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187544663056 0.210909579961 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342032381465 0.0618886996521 55% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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